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The Dearth of Editors

When you write, think: the reader, the reader, the reader

Vol. 6, Issue No. 7 | April 13, 2010 By Denny Hatch
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IN THE NEWS

'Perfect' is just the half of it
So, (I'm thinking while crawling south along I-95 Friday evening, with the start of the weekend's rains already more than doubling travel times), what is happening in the first act of “Death of a Salesman”?

It's clear that I won't make it in time for at least the first minutes of the opening night at the professional Resident Ensemble Players at the University of Delaware. All I can do is drive the stop-and-go 8 mph along with everyone else. And summon the play in my mind.

Ah, yes, the babbling, daydreaming Willy Loman, aging badly from a hard life of sales on the road, is in his Brooklyn house, frightening his wife with his erratic behavior. He's also yelling at his grown boys—particularly Biff, who had been Willy's great hope and now is his constant disappointment.

So that was Act 1. You know that phrase: Wow, what are they going to do for a second act? Well, I found out, because when I finally pulled into Newark, Del., and entered the theater, Act 2 was about to begin.
Howard Shapiro, Theater Critic
The Philadelphia Inquirer,
March 15, 2010
As I get older—and my time on this planet gets shorter—I go berserk when people promise one thing in writing, deliver something else and waste my time.

At right "IN THE NEWS" is the lede of Howard Shapiro's review of "Death of a Salesman" by Arthur Miller at the University of Delaware, roughly an hour's drive from my house in center city Philadelphia.  

I wanted to know one thing quickly: was this production worth the trip?

Of the 403-word review, the first 88 words are devoted to the excruciatingly dull details of how Shapiro got stuck in stop-and-go 8 mph traffic that caused him to miss Act I.

Shapiro spends the next 94 words dumping all over Arthur Miller's first act—which he has not seen:

Ah, yes, the babbling, daydreaming Willy Loman, aging badly from a hard life of sales on the road, is in his Brooklyn house, frightening his wife with his erratic behavior. He's also yelling at his grown boys—particularly Biff, who had been Willy's great hope and now is his constant disappointment.

In all, 182 words—or 45 percent of this supposed review—are expended (1) highlighting Howard Shapiro's self-described inability to keep an appointment and (2) wasting my time.

Shapiro and his editor—if such an animal exists in the bankrupt Philadelphia Inquirer—should be fired for letting this irrelevant drivel see print.

My message to Howard Shapiro—and to everyone that writes for public consumption (as opposed to private diaries or journals):
  • Consider the reader's needs and wants before your own.
  • Ruthlessly self-edit, because most businesses do not have professional editors.

Takeaways to Consider
The Two Greatest Editors

Shortly after six o'clock on a rainy March evening in 1946, a slender, gray-haired man sat in his favorite bar, the Ritz, finishing the last of several martinis. Finding himself adequately fortified for the ordeal ahead, he paid the check, got up, and pulled on his coat and hat. A well-stuffed briefcase in one hand and an umbrella in the other, he left the bar and ventured into the downpour drenching mid-Manhattan. He headed west toward a small storefront on Forth-third Street, several blocks away.

Above is the lede paragraph of A. Scott Berg's 1978 biography of legendary editor at Scriber's, "Max Perkins: Editor of Genius." Perkins was heading off to take questions from a room full of college students. It was Perkins (1884-1947) who shaped, slashed and flyspecked the works of a number of the twentieth century's greatest novelists—Ernest Hemingway, Thomas Wolfe, F. Scott Fitzgerald, J.P. Marquand, Erskine Caldwell, Marjorie Kinnon ("The Yearling") Rawlins, Alan ("Cry the Beloved Country") Payton and James ("From Here to Eternity") Jones.

Takeaways to Consider

  • Fool me once, shame on you; fool me twice, shame on me.
  • When you write for public consumption (as opposed to private diaries or journals), always consider the reader’s needs and wants before your own.
  • Ruthlessly self-edit, because most businesses do not have professional editors.
  • Delete anything that could get the reader off subject.
  • "Writing is easy, all you have to do is cross out the wrong words."
    Mark Twain
  • Know your readers, and only go off-message with personal digressions if you are sure they love your work and are delighted with everything you write.
  • Always put your work through spell check before releasing it. In the world of the Internet, a typo is forever.
  • Before clicking the “Send” key, wait three hours, clear your head, and then re-read your message afresh. Chances are you’ll see some obvious needed changes.

Web Sites Related to Today's Edition

"Max Perkins: Editor of Genius" by A. Scott Berg
http://url2it.com/cmro

Briton Hadden, "The Man Time Forgot"
http://url2it.com/cmrp

"Time Capsule 1923"
http://url2it.com/cmrq

"Ask the Pilot" in Salon.com
http://url2it.com/cmrr
 
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Dev. Kinney - Posted on April 15, 2010
Yes, Time was once very snappy writing, and covered art & literature well. But I am often amazed at current writing in Harper's these days. Case in point is the master of nostalgia Richard Rodriguez' lament concerning San Francisco's famed newspaper history titled "Final Edition, Twilight of the American Newspaper" in the November 09 edition. Definitely not a waste of time.
Dan Collins - Posted on April 14, 2010
Well said Denny- egocentric babbling used as an excuse and filler for not doing his job. Seems like you hit the nail on the head in my humble opinion. Thank you.
Ross Turney - Posted on April 14, 2010
Good advice - wait a few hours before sending something you've written. When I do that I read stuff I can't believe I wrote.
Drayton Bird - Posted on April 13, 2010
God bless Denny Hatch. Even without Martinis, streets ahead of the lot!
Wash Phillips - Posted on April 13, 2010
Right on , Ms Bowhay.
Also, Mr. Barcia, regular readers know Denny has used "lede" in this column many times before. Readers should have noted it often. I and others use that spelling WHEN REFERRING TO not just openings of journalistic pieces, but direct mail, P/R, collaterals, industrial movies,etc.
But I'm sure Denny appreciates your close reading of his pubs.
Anne Bowhay - Posted on April 13, 2010
Mr. Hatch's use of "lede" is not a typo - it's the spelling used by journalists.

lede n. The introductory portion of a news story, especially the first sentence.
[Obsolete spelling of lead, revived in modern journalism to distinguish the word from lead, strip of metal separating lines of type.]
Joe Barcia - Posted on April 13, 2010
Denny, let he who is without sin cast the first stone.

I hate to resort to sarcasm because you are one of the most clear-thinking writers I know and you deserve some allowances for that. And God knows I've made my share of writing errors. But due to the subject matter at hand, I'm afraid you've forced me into it. You wrote "Before clicking the “Send” key, wait three hours, clear your head, and then re-read your message afresh. Chances are you’ll see some obvious needed changes." With that said, see typos in Paragraph #2 ("lede") and #4 ("caused him miss").

Hey, crap happens!

Joe Barcia
Barcia Direct marketing
















Joan Bodenheimer - Posted on April 13, 2010
Check out cover letters people are writing when applying for a job. Nowhere else have I seen such a hodgepodge of gobbledygook of no interest to the prospective employer who is deluged with letters and resumes.
Richard Armstrong - Posted on April 13, 2010
A college production of "Death of a Salesman?" Heck, Denny, I could've told you it was bad before you picked up your car keys!
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Archived Comments:
Dev. Kinney - Posted on April 15, 2010
Yes, Time was once very snappy writing, and covered art & literature well. But I am often amazed at current writing in Harper's these days. Case in point is the master of nostalgia Richard Rodriguez' lament concerning San Francisco's famed newspaper history titled "Final Edition, Twilight of the American Newspaper" in the November 09 edition. Definitely not a waste of time.
Dan Collins - Posted on April 14, 2010
Well said Denny- egocentric babbling used as an excuse and filler for not doing his job. Seems like you hit the nail on the head in my humble opinion. Thank you.
Ross Turney - Posted on April 14, 2010
Good advice - wait a few hours before sending something you've written. When I do that I read stuff I can't believe I wrote.
Drayton Bird - Posted on April 13, 2010
God bless Denny Hatch. Even without Martinis, streets ahead of the lot!
Wash Phillips - Posted on April 13, 2010
Right on , Ms Bowhay.
Also, Mr. Barcia, regular readers know Denny has used "lede" in this column many times before. Readers should have noted it often. I and others use that spelling WHEN REFERRING TO not just openings of journalistic pieces, but direct mail, P/R, collaterals, industrial movies,etc.
But I'm sure Denny appreciates your close reading of his pubs.
Anne Bowhay - Posted on April 13, 2010
Mr. Hatch's use of "lede" is not a typo - it's the spelling used by journalists.

lede n. The introductory portion of a news story, especially the first sentence.
[Obsolete spelling of lead, revived in modern journalism to distinguish the word from lead, strip of metal separating lines of type.]
Joe Barcia - Posted on April 13, 2010
Denny, let he who is without sin cast the first stone.

I hate to resort to sarcasm because you are one of the most clear-thinking writers I know and you deserve some allowances for that. And God knows I've made my share of writing errors. But due to the subject matter at hand, I'm afraid you've forced me into it. You wrote "Before clicking the “Send” key, wait three hours, clear your head, and then re-read your message afresh. Chances are you’ll see some obvious needed changes." With that said, see typos in Paragraph #2 ("lede") and #4 ("caused him miss").

Hey, crap happens!

Joe Barcia
Barcia Direct marketing
















Joan Bodenheimer - Posted on April 13, 2010
Check out cover letters people are writing when applying for a job. Nowhere else have I seen such a hodgepodge of gobbledygook of no interest to the prospective employer who is deluged with letters and resumes.
Richard Armstrong - Posted on April 13, 2010
A college production of "Death of a Salesman?" Heck, Denny, I could've told you it was bad before you picked up your car keys!